hey, how are you? (revised)
it was one of those days where you wake up and you know you are not simon. you don't even think about simon. you don't even think about you. you know who you are and who you aren't and you are not...
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beautiful, just beautiful! and it's so alone, and there is such darkness hanging over it, and we sense that something terrible has occurred, this simon has died, perhaps, or martyred to some cause or...
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hi jim, and thanks for your wonderful comment! it felt right when i wrote it, so i'm glad that it worked out for you too! i'm going to try that on the italics. originally i had quotation marks around...
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yeah, the itals do it, i think. and how about "one of those days" for the title, and then just go into your original first line to begin the body. i didn't mention it earlier, but there is a deep...
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more i think about it, the present title is okay too. i usually despair over titles anyway, and often end up settling (as i suggested to you) on the first line.
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i'll think it over a bit more. i liked your idea of using the first line, because i've been meaning to try to do that (and might change a previous one that i'm sending out today in that manner), but i...
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ha! i love this....wonderful progression, and subtle understatement in between the seemingly innocuous lines and great ending. But now i can't get that Who song out of my head.... Who Who Who who i...
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that solves it then! jim wins on the italics, ray wins on the title. :P thanks you guys!
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Hi Courtney. I only have a few minutes but I wanted to let you know I've been enjoying your wonderful poems. This is one of my faves of yours. Thanks so for sharing your talent here with us. take...
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oh, Kerri, that's so incredibly sweet of you to say! thank you! courtney
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Courtney, This is first one I've read of yours and you captured me. The feeling of loss is there and this reader wonders about what happened to Simon. The depiction of rambling is strong. I'll be back...
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you've an incredibly strong, confident voice in your poems. i like how you open with it was one of those days where you wake up and you know you are not simon. before you've even introduced us to the...
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